Yet he did not in any way stop his insolence, but was even more filled with arrogance: These two clauses say roughly the same thing, that his pain made Antiochus even more arrogant. Good News Bible‘s model here will be difficult to translate. Contemporary English Version is better with “But the pain just made Antiochus more arrogant than ever.”
Breathing fire in his rage against the Jews, and giving orders to hasten the journey: Breathing fire in his rage against the Jews means Antiochus shouted angry threats against the Jews. An alternative model for the first half of this verse is “But even this great pain did not stop him. It just made him more arrogant than ever. He shouted fiery threats [or, terrible curses] against the Jews, and yelled at his chariot driver, ‘Go even faster!’”
And so it came about that he fell out of his chariot as it was rushing along, and the fall was so hard as to torture every limb of his body: And so it came about that introduces the last half of this verse as a result. Good News Bible says simply “As a result.” Rushing along may be rendered “speeding along” (Contemporary English Version). The Greek is literally “whizzing” or “whistling,” which may work for some languages. For and the fall was so hard, Good News Bible and Contemporary English Version have “with such a thud.” Some translators, particularly in some African languages, will be able to use an ideophone here. The Greek verb rendered torture suggests that Antiochus’ body became disjointed. His experience may reflect the torture of Eleazar on the rack (2Macc 6.28) and the pain of the women who died after being thrown to the ground from the city wall (2Macc 6.10). This whole sentence may be rendered “So the chariot raced on, but Antiochus fell out and hit the ground so hard [or, with such a thud] that every bone in his body was thrown out of joint.”
Quoted with permission from Bullard, Roger A. and Hatton, Howard A. A Handbook on 1-2 Maccabees. (UBS Helps for Translators). New York: UBS, 2011. For this and other handbooks for translators see here.